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Coming back soon... to be published within the HOAX #22 issue of antiTHESIS, a Melbourne University publication. x
For my boyfriend, who just happens to be the most amazing person I know. One morning I couldn't move because I was in so much pain and he made me feel a little less hopeless and a whole lot more loved. And that's ^ how it went.
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Given 2011-09-07
Ghost Armor by `Amberlouie is a dark, poignant tribute to a lover in hard times. ( Suggested by zebrazebrazebra and Featured by Halatia )
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8Happiness Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2011

`Gouge my chest,
separate the heart,
wrenching all the vessels.
Examine it,
a Broken Soul.
You left me harrowing alone.`

Sorry, but reading your poem made me write that sort of, I like it, the beautiful pain inside this poem and how you managed to draft your emotion in words, amazing. <3
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Amberlouie Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2011  Professional Writer
Great that you wrote a poem response, thank you x
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8Happiness Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2011
(:
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Alhadis Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2011  Professional Digital Artist
Beautifully written. :) Only criticism would be that you misspelt "armour". But other than that, it's nice. :D
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Amberlouie Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2011  Professional Writer
I think you can spell it either way, I would usually spell it armour but then I got confused :] Thanks for the comment.
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Alhadis Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2011  Professional Digital Artist
You're welcome. ^_^

(Erm, "Armor" is the American spelling... "Armour" is the Traditional/English/Australian/"Rest-of-the-worldian" spelling. Thanks to American spellcheckers, it's getting easier and easier to get confused. :confused: )
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Amberlouie Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2011  Professional Writer
'Armo[u]r' is just one of those words that really confuses me, which is stupid because us Australian's have the 'u' in everything, like 'arbour' or 'behaviour'. I'm going to put it down to being CFS-fucked in the brain, forgive me? :P
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Alhadis Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2011  Professional Digital Artist
No, we were always using the U's. :) It's just Americans that insisted on cutting them out because Noah Webster reckoned it'd "make more sense".

Just install the Aussie spellcheck for your browser if you're not certain. ;)
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Amberlouie Featured By Owner Sep 12, 2011  Professional Writer
I just said that ''Armo[u]r' is just one of those words that really confuses me, which is stupid because us Australian's have the 'u' in everything, like 'arbour' or 'behaviour'.' Not that there was never 'u' in anything :] I think you've misunderstood that sentence. I do have an Aussie spellchecker but I don't write in word, I write in notepad. Nevertheless, thanks for the pick up. x
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Alhadis Featured By Owner Sep 12, 2011  Professional Digital Artist
You're welcome. ;) Hey, I was once a writer too.

Just didn't want such a beautiful prose soiled by typos, hehe. :) Quite a talent you've got.
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Nemonus Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2011
I love "blacksmith suit" and "small sobbing sighs" and "second spine", and just the way you've handled weight and lightness in this poem.
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Amberlouie Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2011  Professional Writer
Long time no speak, stranger. How are you? How is poetry? Thank you for your comment, so apt!
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Nemonus Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2011
Aw, I'm so glad you recognize me! :blushes: I'm doing okay! Very busy. I'm writing a decent amount of poetry but not a lot of it is really good enough to even be posted here. I'm simultaneously trying to learn how to word things properly, and how to figure out what parts of my life are worth mining. And unfortunately they told me I'd graduated or something, so I'm a bit out of touch with what's being published.

I'm really in love with this poem, though. It just has great imagery and I keep coming back to it. :)
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Amberlouie Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2011  Professional Writer
Awh, as if I would not. I even remember your poem you got published with us last year. Still amazing on recall, too. I like that, that you're figuring out what parts to mine in your life. I love the word 'mine' too. I think that's what my issue with words is as well, that I have a lot going on but no way to cultivate it and expose it, and work it out on paper. I hope you at least have it halfway figured! As long as you read, you'll always grow. Thanks for this comment, it's really sweet + making me smile xx
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Nemonus Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2011
:D I have fond memories of that as well.

Yeah, and sometimes I'll have something to mine but not the right atmosphere or metaphor to go with it. The almost science-fictiony feel of your "armor" poem compliments the realistic emotion, and I love that. (Yes, I am just going to keep complimenting you.) It's that sort of thing that I'm continuing to work on.

You're right about reading; getting inspired by published poets is the way to go. Thanks for the help! And you're welcome about the comment.
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Amberlouie Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2011  Professional Writer
I often get so frustrated with how I have things to say, but those things do not want to answer me. So, I keep those beatings within myself until a regurgitation of expression happens, which feels too far and few between. I need to write more like this, open up the close-knit of language and really just speak myself. I am learning from other poets how to do that, specifically ~SameOldSongs. I recently edited his work in Voiceworks Magazine and just felt so enamoured by the way he lets things breathe. Which reminds me, are you under 25? If so, you need me to pester you to submit to it. [they pay and are awesome and yes, I'm bias]. xx
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Nemonus Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2011
Yep. I call it "percolating"...I will check out that poet! Also, I am under 25, so would definitely be interested in this magazine. Mind sending me a link?
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Amberlouie Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2011  Professional Writer
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GabrielSaint Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2011
. I can see you get this alot about this poem,but I honestly think it was beautifully done. It's like you transport the reader right into the midst of the emotion. Keep up the outstanding work.
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Suprefish Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2011
:iconitsbeautifulplz: :iconpurpleheartplz:
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PoeticVine Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
This brought tears to my eyes. Thank you.
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CailinLiath Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2011
Remind me if/when you're ready to go over this one.
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Gemfire Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2011
Why were you in so much pain that you couldn't move? D:

(this is absolutely wonderful, by the way <3 )
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Amberlouie Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2011  Professional Writer
I have Chronic Fatigue Syndrome/ME. I am constantly in pain, but that day I dunno, my body just wanted to shut down on me. x
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Gemfire Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2011
Aw, wow, I'm so sorry D8 will it ever go away? It sounds horrible!
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Amberlouie Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2011  Professional Writer
Hopefully! :] Had it for 3 years now x
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Gemfire Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2011
That's terrible! I hope it does go away, do you take a lot of painkillers for it at least so it doesn't hurt so bad?
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Amberlouie Featured By Owner Sep 12, 2011  Professional Writer
not many medications work, and painkillers don't work because it's a migratory pain :]
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Gemfire Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2011
Oh my goodness, I'm so sorry D: That's just awful ):
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Amberlouie Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2011  Professional Writer
don't be sorry :] it's bad but it's not 'awful'. Not dead yet :]
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LadyofGaerdon Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2011  Professional Writer
"everyone is a wound,
waiting to be sewed clean."

- God, I hope I see that in a book of famous quotes some day.

Also, a brilliant poem. I understand the subject matter all too well and you've captured it perfectly. Lovely.
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KikiWolfeLion Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2011
usually i dont look at words but it was the title that took me in
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ForbiddenObsession Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2011
love the odyssey reference!
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ripjaws-girl21 Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2011  Student Traditional Artist
Beautifully written. This was captured so amazingly well; a bright ray of hope shining into a bleak pit of hopelessness and despair. Very moving.
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MettagiriSuru Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2011  Hobbyist
^__^ very well deserved DD!!
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Puppy-eater Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2011  Student General Artist
I love how this feels really gentle, but still ends up being so poignant. You are truly a master of words. :clap:
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DoctorHorrible-8D Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2011
Beautiful.
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kremlin-dawn Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2011  Hobbyist Photographer
<3

Simply beautiful.
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Sigma-Echo-Seven Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2011  Student Writer
That was beautiful.
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TaciturnReserve Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2011  Student Writer
A truly beautiful poem. The emotions are almost tangible. And I love love love the clever allusion to Odysseus.
Congratulations, yours is a DD well deserved! :)
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Amberlouie Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2011  Professional Writer
Oh, thank you! :heart:
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angelStained Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2011   Writer
'grats, haha. I remember seeing this awhile and never got around commenting on it. Admire how you can write about a relationship so well— rather gentle and everything. It's sweet how you've used I / you to make this more... intimate as well.
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Amberlouie Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2011  Professional Writer
:heart: thanks, angel! x
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sto67 Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
honestly this is amazing how you captured your emotions so exactly.
very beautiful piece =)
congrats on the DD!
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Amberlouie Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2011  Professional Writer
Hey, thank you for your sweet comment! :D Glad you thought I captured it well. x
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Lit-Twitter Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2011
Chirp, congrats on the DD, it's been twittered. [link] :)
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Vigilo Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2011  Student Writer
Congratulations! This is so well deserved I don't even.. :heart: So gorgeous!
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Amberlouie Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2011  Professional Writer
Awh, thank you so much for the sweet comment :heart:
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wreckling Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2011   Writer
Look at you on DD number 6. Congrats, Amber. :]
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Amberlouie Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2011  Professional Writer
Woah...I may have slightly groaned when I saw 11 messages. I also thought 'What have I done?' or 'Who have I attacked?' Hahah, thanks! :heart:
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